You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Congratulate him/her for also being accepted •Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate •Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together

Hello Rana, I am writing to congratulate you for accepting the offer letter .
Additionally
,I want to let you know that the flight tickets are confirmed. First and foremost, I would like to discuss
about
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the accommodation.One of my family
member
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who lives in
paris
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is looking for two tenants.They invited me to stay with them.I felt
this
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be a good idea to share the condo with them .So that I might not feel homesick during the initial days .
Moreover
, they will help me in finding
the
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part time
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job.If you are comfortable you can accompany me. After attending
the
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college we have
lot
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of activities to participate
.
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We can take part in
Trecking
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Tracking
,Swimming and Cycling .All these events are hosted by the College.
Additionally
, the College has the best Library in the City .We can have
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time over
their
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.I'm feeling very excited to
persue
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pursue
my undergrad in Paris. I'm looking forward
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your reply. Yours lovingly
vikram
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task response
Ensure that the response covers all aspects of the prompt. Make sure to congratulate your friend and ask about being roommates and discuss possible activities in detail.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of ideas and use appropriate linking words to create a more cohesive and coherent letter. Additionally, include a proper greeting and closing for the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • congratulations
  • ecstatic
  • roommate
  • accommodation
  • expenses
  • cultural activities
  • museums
  • landmarks
  • French cuisine
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