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The line graph shows the regional household recycling percentages in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.

The line graph shows the regional household recycling percentages in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.
The line graph illustrates how different domestic
waste's
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 recycled in the
UK
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,
France
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, and
Germany
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 from 2005 to 2015. The recycling rates of the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 showed a steady but significant rise over the
period
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,
while
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 the percentage of recycled waste in
France
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 experienced a downward trend.
Firstly
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, In 2005, the recycling rates of the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 were nearly 35% and 20% respectively.
Germany
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's
rate
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 increased sharply throughout the
period
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, exceeding
France
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's
rate
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 in 2009 and reaching almost 60%
in
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 the end of the
period
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.
In addition
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, the proportion of recycled waste in the
UK
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 grew to 40% in 2007 and
then
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 remained steady until 2009. During 2009-2011, it experienced a rapid surge to more
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 50% and
also
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 continued with a gradual increase to 60% in 2015.
On the other hand
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, In early 2005, the recycling
rate
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 of
France
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 (50%) was the highest among these three countries.
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, it dramatically declined to 30% in 2013.
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 there was a growth of 10% in 2015,
in contrast
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,
France
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's recycling
rate
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 was the lowest
in
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at
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 the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, germany, period, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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