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activities

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the activities

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people

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between 30 and 50 years old and

most

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the most

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lovely thing to spend time

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on is

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reading among persons from

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list of countries.

However

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music

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least

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the least

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popular activity.

Also

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, there is no information from other pastimes except reading. Only

americans

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love

music

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. In

this

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table

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we can see that Japanese are only read and most

people

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that

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who

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read in

this

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age range are from Japan.

Australians

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Australians'

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most likely activity is watching TV and least likely is sleep and

music

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. Chinese

people

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spend most time

for

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apply

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readind

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reading

and hobbies,

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they just do not spend time

for

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music

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for americans

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americans

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Americans

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one of the most famous

activity

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activities

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music

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, TV and Beach. In Canada,

people

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interested

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are interested

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in sports but nobody

interested

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is interested

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beach

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the beach

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. Evidently,

koreans

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Koreans

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also

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love to read and

not

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are not

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so interested in

music

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. In England,

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a persons'

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persons'

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person's

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favorite

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favourite

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pastime is reading as same as in

france

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France

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The table below give information about Favorite Pastimes in different countries.

Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their hometown. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

For many people, the reason they work hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example, working for charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to the younger). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The Superiority of Formal Education Over Life Education

Some people believe that the rapid increase in population these days is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Others believe that the world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society.