Some people believe that non academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate only on academics. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Pursuing
of
high academic Change preposition
apply
score
in Fix the agreement mistake
scores
school
is considered one of the most important goals for some which leads to many adopting the idea of removing non-academic related subjects
like P.E and cooking from the learning curriculum. I moderately disagree with this
initiative and will give my rationale in this
essay.
Children
are currently undergoing extensive theory sessions in school
with academic subjects
just to potentially do well in life and win in the competitive environment but this
may affect their mental health. Take learning Math in some Asian countries as an example, many Asian parents enrolled their children
on extra Math lessons
outside of school
just to be among the top-tier students
in school
which created a lot of stress on students
. Moreover
, some parents pressure their kids to spend less time on their favourite sport in high school
to make time for studying in order to be academically qualified for a prestigious university which causes some students
to be burnt out. This
development seems harsh and may hinder their growth because of the mental stress.
On the other hand
, some children
should spend time on sports and other soft skills such
as cooking. The approach of removing non-academic subjects
from the learning syllabus is not appropriate for some students
because in these subjects
, some will thrive, and not only that students
can earn valuable skills and lessons
from going through these subjects
. Furthermore
, with increased knowledge and the ability to keep oneself healthy from P.E. sessions or the ability to cook for oneself, young people will have more energy to focus on academic lessons
in the long term.
In conclusion, I disagree with the notion of making more space in the syllabus for academic lessons
by downsizing non-academic sessions. This
development could impact negatively on children
and potentially cut them off from the potential to grow both academically and the ability to have soft skills.Submitted by tu.diepminh on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite