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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
From the middle of 1900's the
population
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 in a
village
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 located near London called Chorleywood has increased
it's
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its
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population
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 gradually. Below map will discuss the
divelopment
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development
 of the
village
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.
Main
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 road
is
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was
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 the only
trasportation
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transportation
 method
wich is
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that
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 the
village
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 people had before 1900.
And there
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There
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 were only
few
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a few
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village
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 people who lived in Chorleywood
village
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 from 1868 to 1883. As the first
majior cunstruction
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major construction
 Chorleywood station and the
railwaay
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railway
railways
 has
cunstructed
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constructed
 in 1909.
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Moreover
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 the
population
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 around the station area
also
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has
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apply
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increased from 1883 to 1922. The
village
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population
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 has upgraded from a
conciderable
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considerable
 amount in between the year 1922 - 1994 . More than 50% of the
population
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 has
covered
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been covered
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in
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apply
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betwen
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between
 these 62 years. Except
of
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for
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population
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increasment
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increase
,
building
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the building
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 of
motor way
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motorway
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 in 1970
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also
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was also
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 a highlighted
devolopment
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development
 of the
village
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. By the year
1994
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1994,
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 the
village
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 had a good
population
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 with a Golf course , a station and a railway, and
newly
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a newly
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 built motorway.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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