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38.Some people think that games can help children to develop a wide range of skills, while others believe that video games have a negative impact on children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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With the advancement of society, it is easy for young
children
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 to get in touch with
video
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games
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. Some people claim that lots of
skills
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 can be studied
while
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 others argue that
children
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 can be exposed to negative impacts. Considering their health and
skills
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, I believe that when playing
games
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,
children
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 should be supervised. On the one hand, the fact that the complexity of
games
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 covers a range of
skills
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 indicates that
skills
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 can be learned by kids.
For example
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,
games
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 which need two players to get involved need two players to communicate and cooperate with each other. During the process, they can learn communication
skills
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 and teamwork.
In addition
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, construction
games
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, like My World, provide an unreal world for
children
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 to establish buildings whatever they want with their imagination or copy houses of the real world.
This
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 cultivates the imagination ability and handcraft ability.
As a result
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, the young not only take a rest but
also
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 learn
skills
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.
On the other hand
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,
video
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games
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, indeed, have negative impacts on
children
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 as these
games
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 affect their mental and physical health.
In other words
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, adolescents can obtain the satisfaction provided by
video
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games
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 without paying any effort, which can make
kid
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 who lacks self-control capacity to be addicted to
games
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.
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, there is passive information contained in
games
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,
such
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 as violence and sex.
Therefore
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, their psychological health is influenced.
Furthermore
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, playing
games
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 for a long time
also
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 reduces the eyesight of
children
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.
Consequently
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, how much time they spend on
games
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 and what kinds of
games
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 they can play should be strictly regulated. In conclusion, the advantages and disadvantages of playing
video
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games
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 should not be ignored. In order to get more benefits from these
games
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,
children
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 should be limited in the time of playing
games
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 and the content of
games
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.

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