The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams above delineate
honey
production stages by the bee and manufactory . Looking from an overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that this
circular process is comprised of the main 6 stages of how bees make honey
and man-made 5 stages of production.
Firstly
, the queen bee puts her egg in a honeycomb, which becomes a larva in the next three days, before growing up totally in a week. After more than three weeks bee leaves the hive to collect nectar from different flowers and gather all nectar in the hive as honey
.
Secondly
, a man-made process occurs, which commences with removing the honeycomb from the hive by be beekeeper. All honeycomb is poured together in the machine to extract honey
. Eventually, the boiling process happens to clean it from toxic materials. Finally
, this
product is collected in jars so that the end product is ready to retail.Submitted by zhadyra.serikbayeva2016 on
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