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The bar chart below shows the percentage of different countries population aged 65 years and over in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of different countries population aged 65 years and over in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035.
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The bar chart below shows the
percentage
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 of different
countries
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countries'
country's
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 population aged 65 years and over in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035.
Overall
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, there is a rise in all countries over the period.
It is clear that
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 in each country
percentage
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 was less than 20
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percent
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per cent
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however
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 in
forecast
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the forecast
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in
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for
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 2035 it will
be
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apply
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move upward
more
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by more
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 than 20
moreover
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 25
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percent
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per cent
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. Starting with the highest prediction, Wales`
percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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 will increase
more
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by more
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 than 25% in 2035, considering that in 1985 Wales had the elevated result (more than 15%), it is
expected
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the expected
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 result. Scotland will have
the
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apply
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second place in 2035 after Wales, for the reason that it will have exactly 25
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percent
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per cent
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. In other countries
as
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such as
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 England,
UK
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the UK
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 and Northern Ireland
percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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 will have the same index. In 1985 England and UK
additionally
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 had the same
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percent
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percentage
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 (15%) but Northern Ireland had less than 15%.
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