The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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illustrates

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the online

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for Film/Music, books, clothes, and travel in New Zealand in the years

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2003 and 2013

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, film and music

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experienced a meaningful increase and took portion more than

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in fourth of total

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.

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, other sectors

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a significant change. In 2003, 19% of people were buying books

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online and 22% of them used

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for

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take

film

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films

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and

musics

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and

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both of them experienced

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increase

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to 22% and 33%, respectively by 2013. More specifically, they accounted for more than half of the total

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in 2013. People from New

zealand

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mainly use internet

shoppings

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for travel with 37%

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but

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fall

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to 29% and

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second place throughout

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all

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in 2013. Clothes

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also

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followed

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trend as Travel and people

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to

bought

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less

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clothes

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online after

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and it dropped from 22% to 16%.

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they made up more than 59% of total

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in 2003, they

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under half of the total in 2013.