The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four

clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
The chart below illustrates the average amount of patients who
visiting
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four clinics each week of a hospital over the six years since 2010. It can be seen that the number of the three categories of
clinic
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clinics
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such
as Birth Control, Eye and Diabetic increased
while
Dental remained unchanged. Despite the fact that (
Although
) Birth Control and Diabetic rates had an upward dynamic the eye issues became most common over the period. There were almost 250
visits
related to birth control in 2010, and it
has
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an upward trend till 2012 with nearly 275
visits
,
however
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however,
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the figures fell significantly in 2014 to 175
visits
, but the numbers
has risen
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to 250 visitors in 2016.
In contrast
,
visits
to the doctor concerning eye issues started lower at 125, grew negligibly over the next two years and it has risen steadily in the next four years to a high number of
visits
to
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at
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350. Diabetic and dental
visits
were consistently less common, with the
numbers
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number
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of 60, which has risen steadily to 100, and finishing the period with a sharp increase to 175.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visits with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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