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These days many countries help other countries by giving free food, medical, or other aid. What are the benefits and drawbacks of this for countries that give and receive.

#countries #food #aid
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The pie charts provide information about five primary energy sources used in
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 in two different intervals and
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their
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unit
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 measured in percentages. To commence with 1980, it observed that oil was
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prefferd
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preferred
 energy source in
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 with 42%, followed by Natural gas
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 26%.
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, it was analysed that coal used
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 only 22%. Even though, it was
remarkable
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 noticeable that Hydroelectric
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 and Nuclear
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 both remained levelled off with 5%. Moving forward with 1990, it
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 that oil was
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in high
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 demand in
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with
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 33%
whereas
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Natural gas
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 a fourth part of
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overall
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 with 25%.
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,
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coal
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 only
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% contribution.
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, Hydroelectric
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 and Nuclear
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 contribute with 5% and 10%, respectively. To give an overview, in both
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period
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 oil was the most preferred energy source in
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.
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,
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 Natural gas depicts only
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minor
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difference
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