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These days many countries help other countries by giving free food, medical, or other aid. What are the benefits and drawbacks of this for countries that give and receive.

#countries #food #aid
The pie charts provide information about five primary energy sources used in
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 in two different intervals and
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their
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unit
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 measured in percentages. To commence with 1980, it observed that oil was
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prefferd
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preferred
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 with 42%, followed by Natural gas
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 26%.
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 only 22%. Even though, it was
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 noticeable that Hydroelectric
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 and Nuclear
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 both remained levelled off with 5%. Moving forward with 1990, it
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 that oil was
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 demand in
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 a fourth part of
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 with 25%.
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coal
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% contribution.
However
, Hydroelectric
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 oil was the most preferred energy source in
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.
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