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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the monthly change in
copper
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,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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prices
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 in 2014. The
prices
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 are measured as a percentage change from the previous month. The
prices
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 of all three metals fluctuated throughout the
year
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, with
copper
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 and
nickel
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prices
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 starting the
year
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 high and ending the
year
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 low.
Zinc
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prices
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 were the most volatile, rising and falling sharply throughout the
year
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.
Overall
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, the price of
copper
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 was the most stable of the three metals, starting the
year
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 at around 3% and ending the
year
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 at around 2%.
Nickel
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prices
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 started the
year
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 at around 2% and fell to around 1% by the end of the
year
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.
Zinc
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prices
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 were the most volatile, starting the
year
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 at around 4%, rising to over 10% in March, and
then
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 falling to around -1% by the end of the
year
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. In conclusion, the
prices
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 of
copper
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,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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 all fluctuated throughout 2014, with
copper
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prices
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 being the most stable and
zinc
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prices
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 being the most volatile.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, prices, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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