Making Recommendations. You normally go shopping in the area where you live. However, you think some of the facilities for shoppers could be improved. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter: •say in general what you like about shopping in your area • say what is wrong with the facilities • suggest how they can be improved Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam You should write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you in
regards
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to the recent deterioration in services offered
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the “Himalaya
Mall
” in downtown San Francisco.
Although
, it is of no doubt and concern that
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still upholds
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pole position in offering
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and sanitary shopping experience to its customers even after 10 years in operation,
in addition
, to the enhanced security measures to keep it lively and safe.
However
, I would like to bring into
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about
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the recent increase in
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safety incidents which in turn caused traffic jams around the
mall
.
Furthermore
, there has been an increase in shops refusing to add price
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on consumer products which causes a lot of inconvenience to customers and
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in added wait times at the checkout counters. In order to address
this
growing concern, I would suggest the
mall
authority
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enforce transparency for visitors by mandating shop owners to affix price tags on each product.
Moreover
, a free
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parking is the need of the hour to mitigate the traffic jam problems near the vicinity of the
mall
. I eagerly
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your response to get traction to implement
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measures for the betterment of the community.
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faithfully, Harsh
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