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you have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: Give details of your stay What were the high & low points of the hotel What are your suggestions; recommendations and / or complaints about the hotel

#city #vacation #hotel #manager #points #suggestions #recommendations #complaints
Dear Manager, I am writing to provide you the feedback about the Sitara Hotel .
Last
 week we spent three nights in your Hotel.
To begin
 with , on the
occassion
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occasion
 of my
daughters
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 first birthday we booked the Hotel for three days.On the first
day
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 we celebrated her birthday and on the following
days
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 we organized
small
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a small
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 party
to
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nearest
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 family and friends.The food is
also
 included in the total package. Me and my family members liked the food.
Especially the
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 Chicken Biryani is
very
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 delicious and the ambiance is extraordinary.The only inconvenience we
experinced
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experienced
experience
is
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 with the staff.The workers are
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a liitle
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liitle
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little
 rude and
missbehaved
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misbehave
 with the event attendees.Apart from that
every
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thing
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everything
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 went as planned. I would
recommed
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recommend
 you
to
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arrange extra space for
the
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parking and train the employees as
the
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hospitality plays a key role in your Business .As a
well
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well-wisher
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wisher
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 I wish you
for
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good success. Thanking you , Yours sincerely, Vikram.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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