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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food.

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Eating unhealthy
food
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 leads to the growth
on
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 the number of ill
people
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. The majority of
people
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 claim that they face
with
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various health issues
due to
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 eating so much fast
food
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.
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concurs
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 with
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 statement because fast
food
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 creates obesity among the
human-beings
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beings
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, and they can not take in vitamins from it which are necessary for a
person
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 life.
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 with, in the
last
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 few decades, many
people
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 have being suffered from overweight which occurs
as
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 inappropriate nutrition.
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 consuming fast
food
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 more than normal,they gain weight
so
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quickly, and
this
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 influences their daily life, work etc. So, obese persons encounter
with
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breathing
problem
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problems
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 because of their
weights
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weight
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 and cannot be active as much as they desire.
The
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 recent study by UNEC
Emprical
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 Research Center proves that 67
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 undergo obesity because of their wrong eating
habit
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habits
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,
specially
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, eating junk
food
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.
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, the absorption of snacks brings undesirable health
situation
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situations
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 for
people
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.
On the other hand
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, for being healthier, receiving the essential minerals and vitamins via healthy
food
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such
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 as fruits,
vegetables
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and vegetables
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 is crucial. Unfortunately,
the
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 number of junk
food
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 manufacturing companies use chemicals and harmful items which generate more profit for them and create many diseases
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 to the vitamins.
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, the inquiry of Business Management School provides
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data based on the stomach pains of
people
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 which approximately 78 percent are related
with
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 items that
used
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are used
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 during fast
food
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 production. So, as
gaining
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they gain
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too much money, big companies endanger the lives of
people
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 by making unhealthy foods and
soaring
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 the number of snack advertisements. In conclusion, the aspects of the majority on the damages of eating too much junk
food
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 are argued in
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 essay. In my opinion, in terms of weight problems and the importance of minerals in
body
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,
this
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 assertion is entirely justified.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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