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some parents think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre- school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better choice for kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that
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when
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a parent
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parent
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parents
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at
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 work, it is better for the
children
 to stay with
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 grandparents
while
other
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others
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 think that the
children
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children's
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care
 centre is better for the
children
 as they provide better service. In
this
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 we will discuss both views.
firstly
, the Childcare centre is
opened
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 in every city and
everyday
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.It
provide
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provides
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 all the service like food,
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and care
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care
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 to the
children
 and closely
montior
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monitors
 every
children
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child
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. They give all the thing to the
children
which
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they need
as well
as
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and
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in
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 the
day
care
children
 meets other
children
 which increase their
intereaction
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interaction
 level and
confident
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.
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 to
this
,
day
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daycare
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care
 is open
everyday
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every
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as
well
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apply
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as
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and
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they have professional
teacher
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teachers
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 who have
degree
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degrees
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. Other the other hand, many
parent
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parents
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 are working full time and they prefer their
children
 to stay with
the
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family
member
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members
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 like grandparents as they trust their parents. In
additon
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addition
 to
this
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 they prefer them as the
day
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daycare
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care
 are expensive and
opened
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open
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 for 8 to 9 hours. In
summary
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summary,
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day
care
 are professional but
due to
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issue
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issue,
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 people prefer their family. In my
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opinion
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opinion
opionion
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i
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I
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 prefer both for the
children
 and it
depend
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depends
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 on the parent which they like
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