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The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided graph illustrates several vehicles that produce
nitrogen
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 discharge. These vehicles include
:
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diesel
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machine
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machines
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,
petrol
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wagon
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wagons
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,
car
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cars
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 and
buses
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.
Overall
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,
buses
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 have the highest
nitrogen
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 radiation,
while
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diesel
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van
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vans
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 have the lowest ones. Regarding
diesel
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bus
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buses
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 and
petrol
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 ones, the
nitrogen
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 discharge produced by both types is the same figure.
However
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,
petrol
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cars
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 still produce double
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nitrogen
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 radiation than other
cars
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, at roughly 11 (
g
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/
km
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). Regarding lorries and
buses
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, the figure for
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 emission of
buses
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 is higher for
car
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cars
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, around 40 (confinement/
km
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) compared to
crate
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crates
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’ around 33 (jail/
km
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). There are two figures that are
diesel
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cars
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 and
petrol
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cars
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 maintain the same level, the former around just under 5(
g
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/
km
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) to roughly 7 (
g
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/
km
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), the latter between 11 and 12 (
g
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/
km
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). Lorries undergo a significant plunge, from roughly 33 to 25 (
g
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/
km
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),
while
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buses
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 hit the lowest point
25
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of 25
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 (
g
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/
km
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)
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then
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and then
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 reach a peak of 43 (
g
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/
km
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).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nitrogen, diesel, petrol, buses, cars, g, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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