The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.
The two charts
illustrates
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the reasons
andfor
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and for
for
travel
and the main problem for the travelling public in the United States in 2009 . The travelling price from one place to another is very expensive
is
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the main reason faced by
public
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the public
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.
Moreover
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they can
travel
mostly for work . The primary reason for
travel
was to commute to
office
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which is approximately fifty percent
while
the least reason for moving was to meet friends and relatives .
Furthermore
16% times people go
for
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shopping
while
approximately one-fifth
times
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people
travel
for personal reasons
also
. The main
reasons
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reason
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facing
travelling
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the travelling
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public was the cost of
travel
that
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is 36% . People give approximately equal value to harsh driving and safety concerns
that is
seventeen and nineteen percent . Both Access to public transport and space for pedestrians
was
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equally
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to highway congestion.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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