The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

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the reasons

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and for

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travel

and the main problem for the travelling public in the United States in 2009 . The travelling price from one place to another is very expensive

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the main reason faced by

public

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they can

travel

mostly for work . The primary reason for

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was to commute to

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which is approximately fifty percent

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the least reason for moving was to meet friends and relatives .

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16% times people go

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shopping

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approximately one-fifth

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people

travel

for personal reasons

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. The main

reasons

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facing

travelling

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the travelling

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public was the cost of

travel

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is 36% . People give approximately equal value to harsh driving and safety concerns

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seventeen and nineteen percent . Both Access to public transport and space for pedestrians

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equally

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to highway congestion.

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The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

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