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The line graph gives information about the number of books that were borrowed in four various libraries in 2014, with the piechart illustratesthe proportion of different types of books over the four months.

The line graph gives information about the number of books that were borrowed in four various libraries in 2014, with the piechart illustratesthe proportion of different types of books over the four months.
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The line graph gives information about the number of
books
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 that were borrowed
in
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 four various libraries in 2014, with the
piechart
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pie chart
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illustratesthe
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illustrates the
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 proportion of different types of
books
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 over the four months. In general, we can see that in Sutton
wood
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 in September the indicator shows the best result over the period, and in
pie
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the pie
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chart
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 the most read genre was fiction
books
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. As can be seen in the line graph, the borrowing for Ryeslip
were
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 down over the period, falling significantly from almost 300
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 to just under 200
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 in September.
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, in Sutton Wood over the first two months borrowing declined dramatically, but in September climbed sharply. In other
libraries
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borrowng
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borrowing
 rose gradually over the period. As is presented in the pie chart,
the
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fiction
books
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borrowed
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were borrowed
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 close to one half,
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 the average for all types is about 15 per cent,
only
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 10 per cent
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books
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was
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were
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 borrowed
overfor
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over for
 months.
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