The line graph gives information about the number of books that were borrowed in four various libraries in 2014, with the piechart illustratesthe proportion of different types of books over the four months.

The line graph gives information about the number of books that were borrowed in four various libraries in 2014, with the piechart illustratesthe proportion of different types of books over the four months.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph gives information about the number of books that were borrowed in four various libraries in 2014, with the piechart illustratesthe proportion of different types of books over the four months.
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The line graph gives information about the number of
books
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that were borrowed
in
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from

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four various libraries in 2014, with the
piechart
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pie chart

The word piechart doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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illustratesthe
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illustrates the
illustrates

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proportion of different types of
books
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over the four months. In general, we can see that in Sutton
wood
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Wood

The word wood should be capitalized in this context.

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in September the indicator shows the best result over the period, and in
pie
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the pie

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chart
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chart,

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the most read genre was fiction
books
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. As can be seen in the line graph, the borrowing for Ryeslip
were
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was

The plural verb were does not appear to agree with the singular subject borrowing. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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down over the period, falling significantly from almost 300
books
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to just under 200
books
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in September.
By contrast
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, in Sutton Wood over the first two months borrowing declined dramatically, but in September climbed sharply. In other
libraries
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libraries,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase In other libraries. Consider adding a comma.

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borrowng
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borrowing

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rose gradually over the period. As is presented in the pie chart,
the
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apply

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fiction
books
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borrowed
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were borrowed

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close to one half,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,

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the average for all types is about 15 per cent,
only
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and only

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10 per cent
self-help
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of self-help

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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books
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was
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were

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borrowed
overfor
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over for

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months.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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