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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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The bar chart below compares estimated global
illiteracy
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rates
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 by region and gender for the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, women's
rates
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 were higher than men's around the world.
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,
illiteracy
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 was significantly higher in sub-Saharan Africa, the Arab world and South
Asia
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. Developed countries had the lowest
illiteracy
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rates
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 for both sexes,
while
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 South
Asia
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 had the highest. For males, the
illiteracy
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 rate was below 30% in 4 different regions, with the exception of Sub-Saharan Africa and South
Asia
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.
On the other hand
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, the female rate was above 30% in 3 regions.
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, the women’s
rates
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 varied between 12% and 20% for the Caribbean and East
Asia
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. One of the interesting data is that the
illiteracy
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rates
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 for men and women in the Americas/Caribbean were almost similar at 10% and 12% respectively. It is another kettle in fish in the Arab States, where the difference between male and female
rates
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 was considerably higher at 28% and 52% respectively.
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