It is important to give children a possibility to act independently and make their own decisions from early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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In our modern society, people want to make
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confident and
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well for their age.
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, somebodies thinks that it is important to give
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independence in
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. I little bit disagree with
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opinion and will explain in
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why. First of all, it is not so smart
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to make
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complex choices, because they are so young and do not know about options and their consequences. Unlike
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older men or women
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have experience in different life situations, little boys or girls never
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hard occasions and do not know how to react, so parents should teach and show by their cases why something is bad or good.
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, teenagers that in 16-17 years might become a
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persons.
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,
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new stage of life and in
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age period they need to make important decisions about their future life or profession. Of course,
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is really difficult but you can not run away from
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and be
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forever.
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, everybody
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to make their young ones able to choose and it is demanding for their future.
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,
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parents need to illustrate how to choose with their
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life stories
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try to give them make choices.
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  • mentor
  • self-reliance
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  • obligations
  • achievement
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