It is important to give children a possibility to act independently and make their own decisions from early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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their
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themselves
, something that may assist them
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more confident. In my
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,
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Children
who are given the option of making their own
decisions
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early
age
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can grow up as
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independent
adults.
For example
, a child, who can decide what type of present to choose for his birthday, will be able to make more
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complicated
decisions
regarding his or her future and may take the whole responsibility
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these
decisions
even if it was not the
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right ones.
On the other hand
, less
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intelligent
children
may abuse
this
chance and
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overexploitation
their parents.
Instead
of learning how to be able to take responsibility from
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age they may dismiss
this
advantage and take it to the negative
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. E.g. a child who is regular to be a part of every small decision may think that he can act all the time
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independently
and make big mistakes without consulting with the adults
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since he or she thinks that he or she knows enough about everything going around and
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need any advice from others.
To conclude
, I think that the issue of giving the option of decision's making to a child from
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age has a lot of advantages and
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. As a parent, one must recognize which situations and which kind of
children
are suitable for
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type of education and act
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according
to
this
both aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • empower
  • nurture
  • authority
  • guidance
  • mentor
  • self-reliance
  • resourcefulness
  • initiative
  • innovation
  • responsibility
  • adulthood
  • independent thinking
  • critical thinking
  • obligations
  • achievement
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