Anyone can use a mobile phone to answer/make work calls or home calls at any place 7 days a week. Do you think this development has more positive effects or negative effects on the individual and society?

In
this
day and age, with the development of
smart
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phones
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life more convenient and easier, there are
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some drawbacks. From my personal perspective,
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that the disadvantages are insufficient to outweigh the advantages, and
this
essay shall elaborate on the rationale. On the one hand, excessive use of mobile
phones
can affect
human's
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health.
For example
, a large number of teenagers are addicted to surfing social networking sites,
such
as Facebook, TikTok, and Instagram on their smartphones. Because of the fact that the contents of these apps are designed
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human
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eye and
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, so young
people
tend to stare at the small digital screen
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.
Consequently
,
this
could have a bad effect on
human's
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eyesight and
their
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sleep quality, which worsen work and study performance. Another disadvantage is that the trend of using smart devices is reducing the relationships among
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people
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. For the reason that it is convenient for
people
to text
message
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messages
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and send
email
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instead
of going outside and having face-to-face interactions with other
people
.
As a result
, the lack of important social skills,
such
as communication and teamwork skills
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make
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it difficult for them to land a job and expand social relationships.
Therefore
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workforce of a nation could
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decrease.
On the other hand
, using a mobile phone can enable
people
to keep in touch with others in
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more easier and convenient way.
For example
, during
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pandemic, citizens were not allowed to leave their
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, but they were still able to communicate with relatives and friends.
As a result
,
this
has eased
people
's loneliness and depression.
In addition
, personal mobile
phones
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become life-saving equipment for unexpected emergency situations. When there is a horrific traffic accident,
people
can immediately make a phone call to the police, rescue team and ambulance which can increase the survival chance for victims.
Consequently
, the development of mobile devices
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to improving
safety
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and convenience of society. In conclusion,
while
there are some disadvantages of mobile
phones
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affect human life,
but
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we cannot ignore the positive aspect of
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device to
human kind
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. The advantages of
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people
to keep in touch with others more
easier
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and convenient
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seem to outweigh the
drawback
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drawbacks
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.
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