In some countries there more young people choosing in enroll in work based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
In recent years selected countries
youthful
people Correct word choice
young
wants
to earn more money because nowadays, most of them Wrong verb form
have wanted
are
like to live Unnecessary verb
apply
luxury
Replace the word
luxurious
life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Therefore
, folk does
not like to study so Correct subject-verb agreement
do
long
period without employment. As Correct article usage
a long
result
, most of the Correct article usage
a result
nation
young generation has Change noun form
nation's
select
vocational training without Replace the word
selected
attend
Change the verb form
attending
the
Correct article usage
apply
university
. However
, I would say on
the training Change preposition
apply
having
Wrong verb form
has
advantages
and disadvantages
. Nevertheless
, my
point of view, Change preposition
in my
take
Wrong verb form
taking
in to
account Correct your spelling
into
this
situation have
Change the verb form
has
advantages
than disadvantages
. This
essay will discuss both views and provide reasons with examples forthcoming
paragraphs.
Change preposition
in forthcoming
To begin
, nowadays, some
states young generation join Change preposition
in some
to
the vocational training program Change preposition
apply
therefore
they will easy to
Rephrase
easily
success
there Replace the word
succeed
job
life. If they joined
vocational training, Wrong verb form
join
program
Add an article
the program
a program
able
to get more Add a missing verb
is able
experiences
. Fix the agreement mistake
experience
Specially
, Rephrase
In particular
Change preposition
in today
today
world some countries opened several vacancies for Change noun form
today's
skill
workers. Replace the word
skilled
Likewise
who is
attend to the on Verb problem
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
job
training they
might Correct pronoun usage
apply
be joined
the Wrong verb form
join
job
very easy
. Change the word
easily
For Instance
: Currently have been open lots of vocational training institute
in Sri Fix the agreement mistake
institutes
lanka
. These places conducted several Change the capitalization
Lanka
on the
Add a hyphen
on-the-job
job
training programed
. Correct your spelling
programs
Past
era had Add an article
The past
A past
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
institute
Change to a plural noun
institutes
nevertheless
no one attends
Wrong verb form
attended
to
that project, everyone Change preposition
apply
try
attempt to Wrong verb form
tried
university
scheme. Correct article usage
a university
However
, these days all of them are going to attend the
vocational training programs Correct article usage
apply
due
to, have a Change preposition
apply
chanced
Replace the word
chance
immediately
Fix the infinitive
to immediately
joined
for employment. Wrong verb form
join
This
is big
Correct article usage
a big
advantages
for young society and their mother Fix the agreement mistake
advantage
country
economy. Because of that, Change noun form
country's
previously
I Rephrase
apply
mention
Wrong verb form
mentioned
at
Change preposition
apply
this
time many of counties youth crowd like to joined
vocational training programs in spite of attending Change the form of the verb
join
university
.
On the one hand, I take into account, having disadvantages
this
situation. Change preposition
of this
Due to
, number
of countries young generation Correct article usage
the number
join on
the Wrong verb form
joined
job
scheme they are unable to success
there education Replace the word
succeed
qualification
. Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
As a result
, when they want to get promotion
Correct article usage
a promotion
their
career, Change preposition
in their
company
Add an article
the company
a company
could not
give a chance for them. A reason is thatWrong verb form
cannot
,
when they want to promote someone they consider education Remove the comma
apply
qualification
. Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
For Instance
, This
is my experience, when I worked as a
HR, and Administration officer, Change the article
an
company
Correct article usage
the company
wants
to give Wrong verb form
wanted
promotion
Fix the agreement mistake
promotions
for
me and other staff members. Who was Change preposition
to
working
our Add the preposition
working for
company
more
than 10 yearsChange preposition
for more
.
Change the punctuation
?
Nevertheless
, at that time company
approved only me, unfortunately company
not approved
other staff Wrong verb form
approve
member
. The reason he Fix the agreement mistake
members
have
not education qualification. Change the verb form
has
Finally
, I would say not only my country all
over the world facing Correct word choice
but all
above
problem Correct article usage
the above
uneducated
people.
Change preposition
of uneducated
To conclude
, when discussing both points of view, advantages
and disadvantages
have lots of positive and negative erectness.by
the wayCapitalize word
By
who is
choosing work Verb problem
,
base
training scheme Correct your spelling
basic
have
more profitable Verb problem
is
to
people and their country in spite of attending Change preposition
for
university
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