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In many countries, sports stars earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that sports stars earn too much money, while others claim that they deserve their high salaries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The bar graph provides information about citizens who preferred to use the
Internet
 in various locations namely at Home, Work, College and Library from 1998 to 2004. To give an overview, it is remarkably noticeable that, people like to use the
internet
 in the home area
whereas
 only a few citizens like to use the
internet
 in the library. To commence with, home percentage, it observed that individual's interest in using the
Internet
 began nearly at 55 in 1998 and in that
period
, it declined and reached below 50. Even though, it boosted and reached the same percentage at the beginning.
While
,
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 work accessed to
Internet
 data depicted below 30% in 1998 and it remained levelled off in 2000. After that, it declined continuously and ended at 17 in 2004.
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Internet
 embarked at 20% and it remained
same
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 in the next
period
 after that, it rose and reached above 22
percentage
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 in 2002. Even though, it reduced
at the end
 of the
period
 by 19%.
However
, the
citizens
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 who used the
internet
 in
library
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the library
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 were lowest throughout the whole
period
.
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