People living in the 21st century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in the previous century. To what extent you agree or disagree.

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In the 21st century era, people have obviously better well-being than those who lived in
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ancient century,
which
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definitly
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definitely
agree with
this
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statement as
nowdays
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nowadays
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everyone is able to access to necessary resources for living and having technology and innovation to be more convenient.
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extent
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the reasons to support my agreement. The first
indicators
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that
make
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the present
life
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is
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better than
life
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in the past is accessibility to four requisites including
foods
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food
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, medicines, clothes, and houses. These days, individuals can easily find clean water to drink and use in daily
life
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by just
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on water valves,
whereas
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our ancestors need to walk more than 5
kilometers
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to bring back clean water from rivers.
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, the present citizens have more prolonged
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life
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lives
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than in the past
due to
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the developed healthcare including modern hospitals, promising medicinal
equipments
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equipment
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or machines, vaccines, and medicines.
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, now individuals less suffer from both famine and human diseases.
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, the development of technology and innovation enables humans to live more
convenient
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and
comfortable
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. With the advancement of technology, they can travel to the opposite side of the world within a day by
planes
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plane
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, which
it
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needs more than 6 months to travel with
these
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number of
distance
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distances
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in the past.
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, the internet
allow
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us to
delivery
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messages to
recievers
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receivers
who live
in aboard
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just less than a second for free,
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it takes more than a month to
delivery
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letters to other countries.
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, the
reccent
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recent
life
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is easier than
previous
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the previous
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life
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. In conclusion,
according to
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the
afforementioned
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aforementioned
reasons consisting of a
reduce
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in suffering and a
convenience
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convenient
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life
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. I totally agree that living in
today
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today's
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era is better than living in the previous era,
which
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and
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our livelihood will be increasingly enhanced, if we come together.
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