Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are the key to reduce accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both views.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Strict punishment
  • Driving offences
  • Accidents
  • Deterrent
  • Reckless driving
  • Penalties
  • Fines
  • License suspension
  • Imprisonment
  • Law and order
  • Potential offenders
  • Fear
  • Education
  • Awareness campaigns
  • Mindset
  • Safe driving habits
  • Infrastructure
  • Traffic management systems
  • Licensing procedures
  • Testing procedures
  • Skilled drivers
  • Public transportation
  • Carpooling
  • Vehicles
  • Advanced safety technologies
  • Enhance
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