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write a letter to marry watson ,palliative case manager ,royal district nursing service about the patient.

#watson #case #manager #district #service #patient
I am writing to refer Mr Robert who has been diagnosed
squamous
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with squamous
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 carcinoma of
left
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the left
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 lung and requires your continued care and support. Now he is set to be discharged today. Mr Robert was admitted to our care on 1
october
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October
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 with complaints of chronic cough, hoarseness and
difficult
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in
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breathing and his diagnosis was confirmed by
CT
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a CT
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 scan. During hospitalization, he has undergone
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a ressection
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ressection
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resection
dissection
 of the lung, chemotherapy and radiotherapy.
However
, his treatment is ineffective
due to
 metastases
occur
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 in
liver
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the liver
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 and spine. Currently, he is comfortable with oxygen therapy and fluid management. He wishes to return
to
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home because of his cancer in
terminal
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the terminal
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 stage. But, his daughters want his father to stay in
hospital
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 for
further
 treatment. Mr Robert is a lawyer and lives with his wife.He has had a history of hypertension since 2008 and has heavy smoker for
past
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the past
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 40 years. I would highly appreciate it
,
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if you could monitor his pain status and help him to manage his symptoms. Kindly assist his need for assistance with
mobility
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his mobility
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 and bathing. Educate his family
member
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members
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 regarding his condition and provide emotional support to them. In
additional
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, for pain management Morphine Sulphate 40mg 4 hourly and 20mg dose as needed. yours sincerely Nurse
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