write a referral letter to Ms susan williams,the hospital health worker, requesting her to see the patient before discharge

I am writing to refer Mr Yanlin who has undergone emergency cardiac surgery and requires your continued
care
and support.Now he is set to be discharged today. Mr Yanlin was presented to our
care
on 31
march
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March
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with chief complaints of severe chest and back pain. He has undergone several
investigation
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investigations
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and has performed
echocardiogram
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an echocardiogram
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was
reveal
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revealed
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that
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apply
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aortic value incompetence for which he has undergone open chest surgery with mechanical value.During
post operatively
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, he made
a
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apply
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good progress and his blood was stabilized gradually.He was started with
exercise
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an exercise
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program by
physiotherapist
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a physiotherapist
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.Currently,he
was
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has been
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started on warfarin therapy. Mr Yanlin is a student and lives alone in Australia.His mother has
came
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come
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to Australia from
china
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China
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for taking
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care
him
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of him
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.He has had a
habbit
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habit
of smoking and has
high
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BP since 2010. He has a family history of heart
problem
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problems
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. I would highly appreciate it, if you could assist him before discharge because
of
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his lease on rental accommodation has recently expired.Kindly educate him
regardind
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regarding
the warfarin therapy. Provide him
proper
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with proper
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wound
care
and monitor his BP to be maintained at 120/80 .
In addition
, help him
regarding
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with
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his weight
losing
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and stop smoking. Yours sincerely Nurse
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