It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do yoy think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

It is
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thing for everybody to take
risks
, both in their professional
lives
and their personal
lives
. In
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this
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and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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of
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that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, there are a couple of main advantages regarding
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taking
risks
to our occupational
lives
and private
lives
.
Firstly
, it will be a remarkable experience for
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both professional and
persona
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lives
.
Secondly
,
people
can learn and add new things to their entire
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through experiences.
For example
, Mr. Martin Luther
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was an Accountant at
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international company prior to
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a
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famous
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takes
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taken
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a
risk
to give up his
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career
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due to
his happiness. I had read his
life
's story and it is mentioned,
he
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that he
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had a dream to be a writer one day since childhood.
However
, he is a famous writer in the world and he
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taken a valuable
risk
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his
life
.
Therefore
, most probably,
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is
a
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best thing to change our
lives
towards
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positive
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.
On the other hand
, some decisions are made
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lot of
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and that
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to
people
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. Most of the
time
people
not taking
risks
at suitable
time
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times
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.
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instance, some individuals who are over aged; more than 40 years old, try to migrate for permanent residency. But, it will be
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because most of the
time
they cannot find a suitable carrier in the particular country to
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survive
. At
this
time
,
people
lost their every
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in their personal
life
and professional
life
.
Hence
, we have
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when we
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a
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risk decisions
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risk
decisions.
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more through
risk
is important before taking the
risks
.
To conclude
, it is important for
people
to take
risks
, in their
carrier
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career
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lives
and their personal
lives
. Despite these drawbacks, I believe that the benefits of taking
risks
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their both occupational
lives
and orivate
lives
is
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higher.
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