Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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is healthy or not is

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governments which have to keep people's health. Because certain foods include a great amount of

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, some people have discussed if sugary

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have to be made more expensive. Admitting that there are always pros and cons to

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idea, depending on the value systems or circumstances, the answer varies. All in all, I partly agree with

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idea. First and foremost, the motivation to make its

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include more

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must be discouraged

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policy. In order to gain popularity with

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, enterprises have a lot of alternatives but every option's expenditure is not the same, which means that adding much

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is the cheapest and easiest method.

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, once the sugary

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' cost becomes higher, the balance of demand and supply with sugary

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must be altered, which makes those

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less popular.

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, each firm starts to

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not to focus on the quantity of

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but to choose the other options to gain popularity.

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but not less important, we have to recognize that certain types of country's citizens heavily rely on sugary

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, which means

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measure discussed in

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essay becomes essential for those citizens’ subsistence but

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becomes in vain for others. Like Japanese, too much

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is thought to be low quality or unsophisticated.

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taste isn't

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as Japanese.

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means the demand for sugary

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in the United States must be higher than

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methodology must be more critical to those people’s expenditures and discourage them from buying those

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. In conclusion, to make sugary

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more expensive is important for enterprises to have high regard for

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because

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is the simplest method to gain popularity, and

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causes damage to only certain types of people to regard

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as essential with regard to their expense.

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, I partly agree with

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idea.

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