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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinctions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Nowadays it is crucial to assist
children
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 to understand between false and
right
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 in their youngest age. personally, I agree that
children
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 should study the difference between correct and incorrect in my opinion, Parents ought to teach them by
punishment
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 to aid them
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in recognizing
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 their behaviour.
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,
children
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 currently they have no control
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 their behaviours and that lead them to
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 many mistakes
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 they have no idea
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 separate between
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different knowledge about
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 and false in their early ages to avoid mistakes as much as they can.
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, it is better to give them some
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 when they
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 wrong tasks or
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 no respect in their talks with teachers and friends etc.
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play area if they finish their
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 that can assist them to correct the mistake they have made. Despite
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, there are a number of significant benefits of
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 that can help
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 to enhance their behaviours and increase productivity,
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,if
children
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 have made a mistake it is pretty from the teacher to give them a smart
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 like
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 a 2 KM or do a report regarding a specific
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. that sort of
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 would improve them without any
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.
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 parents can give
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their
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 gift when
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 choices and no gifts or there
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 no outings if they do bad things.
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, it is frequently said that
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 can help
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 to separate between true and false, it can be clearly said that parents and teachers ought to give them an intelligent
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 to keep them active and not frustrated,
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 strongly believe that
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 supports my point of view.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • moral values
  • consequences
  • reinforce
  • excessive
  • harsh
  • negative effects
  • emotional well-being
  • psychological well-being
  • positive reinforcement
  • rewards
  • praise
  • discipline strategies
  • time-outs
  • loss of privileges
  • natural consequences
  • age-appropriate
  • humiliate
  • harm
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