The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.
The line graph illustrates it climbed to
number
of patients who visited clinics between 2010 and 2016 for four particular reasons.
Change the article
a number
the number
Overall
, eye problems are increasing rather than other problems and birth control reamins
almost Correct your spelling
remains
same
as where it was started.
Correct article usage
the same
firstly
, dental
problem Add an article
the dental
was
gradually increased during the period, Unnecessary verb
apply
it
accounted Correct pronoun usage
they
Change preposition
for morethan
morethan
50 individuals in a week and Correct your spelling
more than
it
reached nearly 200 Correct pronoun usage
they
in
Change preposition
apply
last
year. when it comes to dental clinic
it started with 100 and reduced to just above 50 in 2012. After that, it significantly increased, to 125 in 20104 and remained almost Fix the agreement mistake
clinics
same
. Birth control was the highest in 2010 and Correct article usage
the same
second
highest was Eye patients and those started with Correct article usage
the second
near
250 and 125 respectively. For Change the word
nearly
next
two Correct article usage
the next
tears
they increased the value as same and birth control created a massive decline between 2012 and 2014, at above 150. Add a comma
tears,
however
Add a comma
,
near
250 in 2016. The number of Eye patients increased Change the word
nearly
from
2012 and it reached 350 in Change preposition
in
final
year.Add an article
the final
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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