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The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.

The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.
The
chart
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show
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shows
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 the
population
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 of
France
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 and
India
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 in
year
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the year
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 1984. I really think
this
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chart
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show
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shows
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 many information about age, but
also
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 very
confuse
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confusing
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 because
many
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of many
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color
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colours
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, many
bar
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bars
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, and
small
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a small
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 number that difficult to see. The
chart
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have
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has
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 blue and red, for male and female, and both
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country
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countries
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 have different
shape
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shapes
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.
France
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have
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has
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 more old
people
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, very more, like many
people
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 live to 70 or 80 or even 90, and many women there, maybe because women live more long time. The bar on top
very
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is very
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 big for women, small for men, so maybe men die
more early
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earlier
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. The
baby
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part
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population
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 in
France
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very
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is very
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 small, so that
mean
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means
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less
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fewer
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 new
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baby
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babies are
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 born.
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Population
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The population
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not
Verb problem
will not
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 grow fast, maybe even go down in future.
India
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not
Verb problem
is not
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same
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the same
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,
India
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have
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has
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shape
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a shape
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 like
triangle
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a triangle
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,
big
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a big
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 bottom and
small
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a small
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 top. That
mean
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means
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 many
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baby
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babies
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, many children, and very few old
people
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.
This
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maybe
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may be
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 because health
not
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is not
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 good or
people
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 work too hard and life
not
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is not
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 so long. The
percent
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percentage
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 of
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baby
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babies
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 around 6 or 7, which is very high, and
this
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mean
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means
show examples
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the India
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India
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Indian
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population
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 grow very fast. When
see
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we see
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 both,
France
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look
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looks
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 like
old
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an old
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country
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,
people
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old
Verb problem
are old
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, slow growth, many live long.
India
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look
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looks
show examples
 like
young
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a young
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country
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, many small
child
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children
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, fast growth,
less
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fewer
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 old
.
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people.
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 I think
this
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show
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shows
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 two
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country
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countries
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 in very different
stage
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stages
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. Maybe
France
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already
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is already
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 rich and
India
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still
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is still
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 growing, so
people
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 live different
life
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lives
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. I genuinely think
France
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old
Verb problem
is old
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 and
India
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young
Verb problem
is young
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, and the difference
very
Verb problem
is very
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 big. The
chart
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show
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shows
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 all
this
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 very
clear
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clearly
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even
Punctuation problem
, even
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 if the bar
look
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looks
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 a bit
confuse
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confusing
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. In future, maybe
India
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have
Verb problem
will have
show examples
big
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a big
show examples
population
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 problem and
France
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have
Verb problem
will have
show examples
old
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an old
show examples
people
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 problem.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, show, population, france, india, country, people, baby with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • age structure
  • populations
  • France
  • India
  • 1984
  • overall
  • different
  • evenly distributed
  • proportion
  • young people
  • elderly individuals
  • largest age group
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