During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of gyms. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his gyms. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Sir, My name is Ignat Bern and we met on a flight from Gdansk to Roma with ITA Airlines on the

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of July 2023. We sat next to each other and during the duration of the flight we engaged in a conversation regarding a vacancy at one of your

gyms

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. I hope you recall

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such

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a dialogue. I hope you will remember who I am as you suggested I contact you regarding a job in one of your

gyms

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. Today I am writing to express my interest

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a position in the chain of your

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. You mentioned that you would like to expand your

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and you would be delighted to employ specialists with

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expertise in the area of training at the gym.

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, as far as I remember, I mentioned

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during the flight that I am

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trainer, so I would be interested to join one of the teams in your gym. I believe that I am an excellent candidate because I have been working for 10 years as a personal trainer at the gym in Gdansk.

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, I have a degree in medicine and my knowledge in

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an area will be useful for the majority of clients during our

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, I would be grateful if you could send me more details

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my email. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Ignat Bern

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

235 words

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