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You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion.

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I read an article in your esteemed newspaper "Time of India" dated 22 June 2023 about an article
of
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on
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 the
town
centres
 of my country. The article is well written and
explained
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explains
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 the aspects of trading
centres
, shopping and sports complex, restaurants and bars etc
However
, some information about
this
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these
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town
centres
are
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is
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 inappropriate. In my country,
town
centres
 are different in metropolitan
cites
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cities
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compare
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 to
rest
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the rest
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 of the state. The
architecture
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architectural
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design
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designs
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 of
town
centres
 of New Delhi and Mumbai are similar
whereas
design
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the design
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plan
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plans
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 of
centres
 in Indore and Himachal are unique as these are newly built and provision of
stadium
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stadiums
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 in these
centres
. I would like to offer you
guided
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a guided
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 tour of my city which will help you to provide accurate details of my
town
 so that in future, you will provide correct and authentic information. Since your reputed newspaper
usually
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 read by millions of people
therefore
 relevant information must be published for general public awareness.
Your
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Yours
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 Sincerely, Amandeep
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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