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Some people believe that free housing should be provided by the government for under-privileged and people who can’t afford to buy a house. To what extent do you agree and disagree with the statement?

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Housing is one of the major points of households' expenses. In fact, it is so critical that a group of low-income families cannot buy or rent a place for themselves, and
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 state's authority gives them a house. I immensely believe that it is a positive approach. First of all, a decent shelter is a given human right, and
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homelessness is the root cause of other social complications. Having a proper home is considered as a basic human right. Like clean water, freedom of speech, and religious freedom, people's habitation has a basic standard.
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 putting a great financial burden on governments to provide free housing, it is the government's obligation to manage the finances through tax and other sources. In a free
country
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 nobody opposes the government's investment
on
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 clean water or freedom,
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 an aware society advocates the notion of free housing for
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the under-priviledged
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under-priviledged
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underprivileged
population
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.
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, in
Scandinavia
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 states
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 free social housing to every household in need since 2010, and
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 is approved by the majority of the societies. Being homeless,
on the other hand
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, is caused by and causes other problems. Families or individuals who go bankrupt are thrown out of their homes, and
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 they should face countless
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obstacles and crimes in the wild of the city. The vicious cycle of social issues costs a lot for the government,
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 the country decides to break it by providing free shelter. A decent accommodation for a poor family elevates their quality of life.
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, criminals abuse homeless people for a temporary place to stay. A homeless person,
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, may have to sell narcotics or be engaged in unwanted adultery activity for a small portion of money. These issues lead to a point where governments decide to accept providing free housing.
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, I think providing zero-cost shelter to low-income households is an obligation for authorities, simply because it is an elementary human right.
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, by doing so, governments are preventing other social problems.
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, every person in the world
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 a place to live.

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Task Response
Task Response: The essay provides a clear response to the question, expressing strong agreement with the statement. Ensure you consider and evaluate different perspectives on the issue to show a balanced argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The essay demonstrates a logical structure throughout, with a clear introduction and conclusion. Ensure that the connection between ideas and paragraphs is well-established, and use a wider range of linking words to improve coherence.
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