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Many countries now face an economic downturn so it is better for each country to focus on its own problems rather than helping other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #face #downturn #country #focus
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 many
countries
 are facing an economic downturn, so it is better for each
country
 to focus on its own issues rather than helping other
countries
. If questioned, I disagree with
this
 statement to a large extent. My preference is explained in the upcoming
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. The foremost reason for disagreeing with the given statement is that, when all the
countries
 are facing
econimical ciris
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economic crisis
, the main idea should be on how
whole
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 world could team up and face the world problem, which would be easier. If
countries
 could work like a team
then
 the
economical
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 crisis would end for
whole
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 world and everyone would
be benefited
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. Adding more points, another reason for why
countries
 should help each other are, if we would deny
to help
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eachother
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each other
, which would cause partial growth, resulting in
growth
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 of
few
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countries
 only
while
 other would lag in growth and development, and they would be set back, public of that
country
 may have to suffer.
However
, some people would think of developing owns
country
first,
since that would be beneficial for the public of that
country
, they would get comfort
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and would live
stress free
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. Another important reason
maybe
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of getting
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 respect at
international
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the international
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 level, corresponding to foreign investors. Concluding, it can be said that both the ideas are right to execute, but only being
self oriented
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 would be kind of selfish, so there should be a balance of both
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aspects and, along own's
country
 other's
countries
 should
also
 grow.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic downturn
  • prioritize
  • solving
  • assisting
  • long-term benefits
  • international cooperation
  • economic stability
  • providing aid
  • diplomatic relations
  • supporting
  • less developed countries
  • overall
  • global economic growth
  • balancing
  • national interests
  • global responsibilities
  • crucial
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