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As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on daily basis are produced in another country and have to be transported long distances . Do benefits of this trend outweigh disadvantages

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Numerous crucial goods,
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 as those needed on a daily basis, are manufactured and delivered from distant regions as worldwide markets expand.
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 reality, in my opinion, offers more benefits than drawbacks, with the benefits being increased availability and affordability of
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 and the potential negative being increased global warming.
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 of the primary benefits of producing and delivering goods over vast distances is the availability of foreign
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 in the
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.
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 indicates that people will have access to things from other
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,
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 as certain agricultural
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 that are grown in another
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,
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 of relocating to a different state.
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, people in Indonesia can consume a mandarin orange
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 transported from China. Another advantage of relocating
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 made in another
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 is that they become more affordable.
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 means that because the same commodities are available in the market from different regions of the world, most merchants will compete with
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 another, resulting in lower prices for consumers.
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, many studies have revealed that in Indonesia after the shortages of palm oil stock in the market, the palm oil’s price is affordable in the competitive range
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 the merchants sell the same exact type of palm oil but are presented in different brands.
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, it has a disadvantage in the form of
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reliance on other
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.
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, creating and transporting natural commodities from
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country
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 to another will make
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country
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 dependent on International markets for the sale of raw materials. As the case, developed
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 as Singapore depends it electricity through natural resource, especially coal, but it is only produced by its neighboring
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 specifically Indonesia. In conclusion,
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 price and accessibility are the primary advantages of generating and shipping over great distances, the issue of the reliance of
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country
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 on another cannot be underestimated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global trade
  • economic growth
  • specialization
  • efficient resource use
  • variety of products
  • consumers
  • accessibility
  • standard of living
  • economies of scale
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental damage
  • importation
  • quality standards
  • local industries
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