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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2), emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2), emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
amount
 of Carbon dioxide gas that every person
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produces
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produce
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produces
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apply
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it
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in the 4 different countries which are
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the United
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United
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the United
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Kingdom
,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal Between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
 , Italy and Portugal show
increase
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an increase
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 during all years
while
Sweden
 appeared
increase
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to increase
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then
decrease
 with
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 . Looking in more detail , Italy and Portugal emerged surge between 1967 and 1977 the
amount
in
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of
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 TONNES UNITES WAS about from 4 to 6 and 1.75 to 2 respectively .
Then
 Italy shows
steady
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a steady
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increase
as
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in
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 contrast with Portugal it shows
noticeable
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a noticeable
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increase
 from around 2 to 4 in 1987 .
the
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apply
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both countries show
slight
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a slight
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 gradual after that show
steady
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a steady
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increase
 the
last
 carbon dioxide
amount
 in 2007 was about 5.5 tonnes for Portugal and around 8 tonnes for Italy . Looking
in to
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into
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United
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the United
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Kingdom
 and
Sweden
 ,
firstly
United
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the United
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Kingdom
starting
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started
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 with
decrease
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a decrease
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 in 1967 the
amount
 was around 10,8 and the
amount
 still
decrease
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decreased
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 all years until arrived
to
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at
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 about 9 in 2007 . In the
begging
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beginning
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 when
Uk was
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the UK
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 decreased
the
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apply
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Sweden
shows
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showed
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a rocketed
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rocketed
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rocket
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increase
 from around 8. 3 to 10.3
then
 the average
amount
stayed
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apply
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decrease
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decreased
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 in all
years
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the years
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 until arrived
to
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at
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 the same
amount
of
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as
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 Portugal which
is
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was
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 around 5.5 .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, kingdom, sweden, increase, decrease with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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