Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. DO YOU THINK THIS IS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?

Availability of similar goods in all
markjets
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markets
is resulting in
similarity
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the similarity
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of nations around the globe.
However
,
this
phenomenon could be seen as a beneficial development,
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completely disagree with
this
viewpoint.
Perevalance
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of
same
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the same
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products anywhere in the world might have some benefits. First of all,
this
mitigate
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mitigates
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the huge gap between
privilaged
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privileged
and deprived communities so as to
conveniant
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convenient
access to
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the smae
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smae
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same
facilities. It means people benefit
easy
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access to fashioned and latest productions of
thier
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their
needs.
For example
, IT students who study in remote areas have
opportunity
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to prepare
cut-edaged
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cut-edged
MAC Book
Loptop
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Laptop
from
nearest
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the nearest
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local shops as other ones who live in the
vacinity
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vicinity
of Apple manufacturers
.
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Furthermore
,
this
trend contributes
reduced
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poverty and inequality
of
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countries
. On the other side, globalization provides
same
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the same
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produtions
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products
in global markets which could bring about adverse effects to many
countries
. From
financial
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viewpoint,
this
approach adversely affects
local
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locally
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manufactured things.
In addition
, governments and local
manufactureres
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manufacturers
will suffer from economic recessions
as a result
of foreign
products
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product
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availability in the long run. From
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prespective
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perspective
, numerous
countries
would
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expreince
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experience
lack
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a lack
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of cultural diversity.
Globalized
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The globalized
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population
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populations
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are more likely to prefer global tastes and trends
prevalance
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prevalence
prevalent
in local retails rather than
traditions
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the traditions
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and customs of
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their owns
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owns
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countries
.
Inconclusion
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,
however
,
globaly
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globally
global
access to similar products may reduce differences between rich and poor, oppositely,
this
can develop bad consequences like loss
diversity
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of diversity
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of cultures and financial recession.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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