The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph displays the
number
of individuals who went to the different types of museums in London from June to October 2015.
Overall
, the
number
of visitors varied significantly during the
months
,
while
in the History, National and British museums the quantity increased until August and
then
decreased. Science
museum
started to drop in September. In June, the most visited
museum
is the Science
Museum
with approximately 430,000 visitors, in the next
month
the
number
fell by around 30,000, in August it grew again by 10,000, in the fifth
month
it rocketed to 500,000, but in the
last
month
it went down to 300,000. The British
Museum
started the period with nearly 420,000, it jumped rapidly to more or less 710,000 in August, but it started to decline in September and October to under 600,000 and 450,000 respectively. The History
Museum
remained the
number
of visitors during the two first
months
, was approximately 400,000, in August it reached its highest point at 600,000 but
then
it started to drop to 390,000 and 250,000 in the
last
two
months
.
Finally
, the National
Museum
had during the
months
of June and July around 200,000 people, it climbed by 100,000 in the next
month
, afterwards, in September it went down to 200,000, in the
last
month
the
number
of people was still decreasing, ending the period with 180,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, months, museum, month with synonyms.
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