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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021
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The line chart exhibits the average monetary
value
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 of three precious metals during the period of 2013 to 2021. Altogether, both gold and platinum started at the same closing
price
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 at the beginning of the chart meanwhile palladium started at a lower
price
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, despite
of
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this
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 the starting
value
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 doesn´t seem to correlate with their growth or decline in
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at the end
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 of the graph. During the period of 2013 to 2016 the
price
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 per
ounce
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 of palladium seemed to stay at around 750
dollars
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 per
ounce
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 until it saw an exponential increase in
price
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 from the year 2016 to 2021 where it peaked circling the
value
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 of 2400
dollars
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 per
ounce
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 reaching the highest
price
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 of all the metals.
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 during the period of 2013 to 2015 gold and platinum faced a decline in
value
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 from around 1500
dollars
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 per
ounce
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 to around 1000
dollars
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 per
ounce
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. It was not until the beginning of 2015 that gold´s
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, price, ounce, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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