Most people believe that social media such as Facebook and Instagram negatively impact society and individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

social apps trend has been increased by our new generation as technology provided us easy access to explore any place
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some clicks in order to gain some information about them.
But
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some
people
argue that using different social
websites
bring
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some negative consequences, and I
also
agree with those individuals
due to
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impact of these sites on mental health
as well as
reduced
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interaction and communication skills. To commence with views of disagreement that investing
time
on scrolling social media
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us
some
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benefits
such
as
time
savage and quick way of communication with our clients and
foreigner
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friends.
In other words
, multifarious
business
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businesses
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totally depend on
this
media as they advertise their products quickly on these social
websites
because of
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number of
people
follow
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who follow
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these
websites
.
As a result
, they do not have to spend
time
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some banners on street walls. Shifting towards views of agreement, mental health problems are not only making
people
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but
also
becoming a cause of large
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amounts
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of expenses which might have to
pay
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by
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patients. To elaborate
it
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,
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exsessive use of
facebook
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Facebook
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and
instagram
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have made
people
sick as they mostly spend their
time
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scrolling the screens and they suffer from
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eyesight
as well as
some mental illness.
For instance
,
according to
world news
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, 70% of
new
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generaton
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generation
is surviving with
the
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lack of eyesight and getting bills to pay large
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amounts
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of money rather than prior to the invention of these social
websites
. In conclusion, every coin has two sides and we can not neglect both of them,
although
social media has many benefits
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our first priority is our health to survive
better
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day with
healthy
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body so
todays
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today
modern apps are
deterimental
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detrimental
for
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us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • dysfunctional
  • impede
  • adverse
  • compulsive
  • obsessive
  • inherently
  • undermine
  • vulnerable
  • censorship
  • exploitation
  • vicious cycle
  • isolation
  • fraudulent
  • dissemination
  • manipulation
  • creativity
  • engagement
  • tolerance
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