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Some people believe that the internet is increasing the gap between the rich and poor, while others argue that it helps to reduce this gap. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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 has helped many to change their daily routine life to something interesting. Some individuals believe that online platforms increase the gap between wealthier and poorer groups.
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, the other part of the group disagrees with
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 view and feels, the
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 has helped to bring them closer.
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 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. On the one hand, big corporations like telecommunication companies are constantly increasing the expense of the
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 service making it, limited
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 for poor
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 in
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 economic crises.
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, they are not able to stay with current world trends.
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, many jobs
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 been replaced by
people
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 who have the right tech skills for the
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, and those who lack
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 skills are not able to take advantage of economic
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.
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, with advances in the
internet
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, unemployment among poor
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 increases gradually.
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, the government has started implementing a few things to resolve
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 issue which allows poor
people
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 to have the required
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 to the
internet
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.
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, with sufficient
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 and careful
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 of online platforms, many
opportunities
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 to express an individual’s talent
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 increase. Many
people
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, irrespective of their wealth level, can express their views in politics, technology, or any other field through social platforms, which can make them famous overnight.
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 results in major lifestyle changes in one's life.
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,
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 to online government services allows them to
use
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 government schemes like income-related benefits, health care aid, educational aid and many more which are specifically designed for them. With
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 advantages and
opportunities
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, I firmly believe, that having
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access
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 allows poor
people
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 to express their talent without any discrimination or societal pressure, which could be a life-changing moment for one and it helps to reduce the major economic gap between rich and poor
people
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. In conclusion, I firmly believe, the
internet
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 comes with its own benefits which could be used by poor
people
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 to reduce the wealth and society gap between different groups of
people
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.
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 the
internet
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 may be not cheap, proper
use
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 of it can open many
opportunities
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 for poor
people
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital divide
  • wealth gap
  • accessibility
  • disadvantaged
  • empowerment
  • digital skills
  • online resources
  • financial disparities
  • bridging the gap
  • digital inclusion
  • economic inequality
  • equal opportunities
  • digital divide
  • information age
  • socioeconomic divide
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