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Nowadays, technology plays a major role in our lives. Some people think it have a positive impact for students, but others concern it as a detrimental item for study. Compare two sides opinion.

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Nowadays,
technology
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 plays a major role in our lives. Some people
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 it as a vital educational tool for
students
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, but others concern it as a detrimental item for the study. Personally, I think there are benefits and shortages for both sides, and the following content will list the reasons. Modern
technology
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 enhances the efficiency
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for
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 people to absorb knowledge.
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online
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 database can provide more data than a substantial one,
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, every member of the library can obtain the information on the library’s website. In
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,
students
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 spend plenty of time
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looking for the information they want,
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, searching on
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 is much
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faster,
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 only
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 less than one minute to wait for the
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 results to pop up.
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, the addiction
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 electronic
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 is
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 a crucial issue
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 a student. In recent years, video games and short-time video
app
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 are popular on the internet. These items distract teenagers from learning,
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, several
students
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 use electronics more than five hours a day or even more, but they spend most of the time on YouTube,
Tik-tok
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 and Facebook,
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, these affect their academic
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. In general,
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assist
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 people to easily obtain information, but several entertaining functions severely affect
students
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’ learning. In my notion,
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 doesn’t cause these problems, human does,
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 should find
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 balance when they are managing their study.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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