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The chart below shows the amount of money spent on consumer goods in two different countries in 2010.

The chart below shows the amount of money spent on consumer goods in two different countries in 2010.
The bar chart below illustrates the consumer spending on goods in
France
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 and the
UK
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, both
France
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 and the
UK
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 spent the most money on cars and computers.
Additionally
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, spending on cameras in the
UK
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 is especially high,
while
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 in
France
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 it is the lowest. In 2010, cars were the goods that shared the highest spending in
France
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 at about 100,000 compared to the
UK
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, which witnessed an amount of money at around 450,000.
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, the
UK
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 spent more money on books than
France
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 followed by books at 300,000 and 400,000. In the
UK
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, the expenditure on cameras was around 350,000, which was double that of
France
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, which was only 150,000. The expenditure on perfume in the
UK
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 came
last
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, with nearly 150,000, and in
France
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, the spending on it is 2 times lower than the spending on books. Both nations spent the most on computers, which shared the same amount of spending, which was around 300,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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