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The chart presents changes in the percentage of students who recieved higher education in different Canadian provinces in 5 years between 2001 and 2006.

The chart presents changes in the percentage of students who recieved higher education in different Canadian provinces in 5 years between 2001 and 2006.
The chart presents changes in the percentage of students who
recieved
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received
 higher education in different Canadian provinces in 5 years between 2001 and 2006. In 2001, the percentage was limited, it went from 3% in
Onatario
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Ontario
 to 7% in New Brunswick. Novascotia with
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 6,5% was second in
portion
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a portion
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 of students. As 4 years
past
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passed
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 by, almost all the provinces had gone up,
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however
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 there were
exeptions
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exceptions
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 as Quebec and Alberta which had risen
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 only 4%. By 2006, some universities went through a growth in the share of international students. Especially
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shown in
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 of New Brunswick where the numbers had increased from 7% to 12%.
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Nevertheless
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 the one who got the most progress was British Columbia. Over a period of 5 years, the shown Canadian provinces have gone through contrasting in
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between
 changes.
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, New Brunswick continued to be
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 place with the highest percentage.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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