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The given diagram below provides the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

The given diagram below provides the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
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diagram below provides the
process
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 by which
bricks
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 are manufactured for the building industry. Brick production involves 7 steps,
starts
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starting
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 from
digging
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the digging
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 stage and
ends
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ending
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 at delivery. The first step of brick manufacturing is digging
clay
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a clay
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 digger machine.
Therefore
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,
this
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 clay
filtered
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 in
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the
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metal grid,
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then
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and then
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 processed in
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the
a
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roller.In
mixture
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a mixture
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combined
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combine
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 sand and water,thereby reducing the plasticity of the material.After,the combination is either kept in mould or cut in
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a
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wire cutter to make
sore
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the sore
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 shape of the
bricks
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.These received
raw shaped
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bricks
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 are dried for 2 and 3 days.Following that,the dried
bricks
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 are kept in
klin
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Klin
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,both
in
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at
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 moderate and high
temperature
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temperatures
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,up to 1300 degrees,and placed in
cooling
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a cooling
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 chamber for 48-72 hours.
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process
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end
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 up with packaging and delivery in the final two steps.Delivery is the
last
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 step of brick manufacturing. In conclusion, the
process
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 of manufacturing
bricks
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 is a complex
process
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 which passes through several stages before the
bricks
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 are ready to be used.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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