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The diagram illustrates all the steps of brick production.

The diagram illustrates all the steps of brick production.
The diagram illustrates all the steps of brick production. It consists of 7 steps.
The first step is
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 the extraction of clay using a digger. The firing process in brick kilns consumes a significant amount of energy.
First,
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it is cleaned on a metal grid and passes through a roller.
Then
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, it is distributed into
molds
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moulds
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 and placed in a kiln
on
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at
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 low temperatures. They begin at temperatures ranging from 200 to 980 degrees and gradually
raise
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rise
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it
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apply
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to the highest,
such
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 as 870 to 1300 degrees.
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, after the firing process, they are placed in a cooling chamber for 2-3 days. concludes with the packaging of the brick and its delivery.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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